The hypothesis section is incomplete. Please add more detail about what you expected to happen and why. The data collection is excellent, but the conclusion needs to connect back to your original hypothesis.
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The experimental procedure and data collection were very well done. Once these revisions are complete, this will be an excellent lab report.
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